Mansion for MurdererMystery

Discussion in 'Map Submission' started by yDuDa_, Jul 1, 2020 at 1:38 AM.

  1. yDuDa_

    yDuDa_ New Member Emerald Member

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    addilia Notable Member

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    good start, but it needs lots of improvement.

    First, you should make custom trees.
    Second, you need to mix the blocks, add some detail.
    Third, I think it needs more than just a wood wall. Something different, the wood wall looks plain and boring.
     
  3. utopiia

    utopiia Notable Member

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    I agree with all of these things! I found a thread/tutorial by one of our amazing builders, @wishing on how to improve the visuals of your map! Here's the link:

    https://www.brlns.net/forums/thread...ual-aspects-of-your-build.116849/#post-922047
     
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  4. EvieIsNotAmazing

    EvieIsNotAmazing Notable Member

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    decorate the outside more!
    for outside floor you should mix some blocks
    inside is pretty nice but more detail pLs


    @builders
     
  5. SplashingPaint836

    SplashingPaint836 Notable Member

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    Pretty plain. Kinda random, what is the theme?

    Texture the grass with green concrete powder and green wool.

    What kind of trees are you going for because they look liked they were from saplings.

    The wooden wall looks very out of place maybe turn it to a gate.

    The pool could be a bit bigger and have a better shape to it.

    Some parts of the buildings lack decorations and furniture.

    The campsite and the pile of sand doesn’t make much sense being there so I suggest to remove it.

    To me it looks like a resort or a vacation spot at the beach. I like the idea of it so it would be beneficial for your map to improve it! :)
     
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    Aidennn Notable Member Emerald Member

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    Okay so, people might have suggested this but heres my list.

    Make the trees yourself so it looks more unique and not too plain.

    The camp area needs to Have more grass, and also add mixtures of blocks in the grass for a more realistic result.

    The pool area needs to be adjusted a little bit.

    Maybe make the map bigger, and also I’d suggest changing the wood wall to a sky looking wall.

    Hallways are a little bit empty so I’d recommend adding paintings, furniture, etc.

    Hope this helps, I’d love to see the updated version :p
     
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  7. lucas1901

    lucas1901 ✯ BrokenLens Builder ✯ Builder

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    Hmm, first you should remove the oak border because that looks abit un-natural, i suggest you add some terrain going up.
    Btw what's the theme for this map? It looks like a modern building, I agree with what people said about removing the tents because it doesn't really fit it with the map, it's a bit flat too, you should add some raised areas to add a bit of terrain into the map and make it less flat. I like the interior though, it looks nice but the hallways are a bit too plain, maybe add some stuff in there
    the parkour doesn't really fit in with the map, you should make custom trees and make some small ones so you can parkour on them if you want some. You don't need the torches or lanterns either because you will have nightvision on BL
    Good luck finishing it though!
     
  8. KhrizKGM

    KhrizKGM ★ BrokenLens Staff ★ Sectional Moderator Builder

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    Yes
     
  9. yDuDa_

    yDuDa_ New Member Emerald Member

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    Ok, thanks, I'll be trying the map better,
    the theme is mansion
     
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    yDuDa_ New Member Emerald Member

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    thanks for the tips i will be improving the map and the theme is mansion
     
  11. arwaffles

    arwaffles Notable Member Emerald Member

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    good luck! the map is already off to a great start! :)
     
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    yDuDa_ New Member Emerald Member

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    Thank you
     
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    yDuDa_ New Member Emerald Member

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    thanks for the tips i will improve the map
     
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    Eriell Notable Member Emerald Member

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    Bruh
     
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    Haroldwp Notable Member Emerald Member

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    I have a few suggestions:

    1. The exterior of the house needs more shape, it looks like a rectangle covered in leaves.

    2. As Addi said, the trees need more work, more shape (ik they're not custom).

    3. It looks like there are glass blocks, maybe make them window panes?

    4. Speaking of windows, try not to make them on the inside, instead add two colored wallpaper.

    5. The pool is in an awkward spot, maybe make it in the middle?

    6. The ceilings are a bit flat, maybe add slabs to give them more detail?

    With a few other details, this house could look spectacular!
     
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